The solution we took was to remove the witness plot and instead have the homeless man murdered in order to make our Thriller opening more easy to follow.
Similarly, we had problems with lighting in this clip. We used other source of lighting to create a focus on the murderer's face however this was only effective when she was near the camera, therefore we decided this clip would not be a good one to use in order to make our opening clear enough.
We used this shot to mimic the previous shot of the homeless man walking up those stairs in order to show our audience that they are now in the same place, implying that he is the next victim. I particularly liked the tilt shot at the end which connotes psychotic tendencies by the camera not staying straight. It suggests that she is not normal which visually presents her as threatening, along with the weapon in her hand.
A quick revision in your last caption, instead of "camera not staying straight" say "tilt shot which is used repeatedly in The Third Man (upload image from the film) to indicate nightmare and disorientation......"..
ReplyDeleteTry to remember to use media language re camera angles and movement, i.e. close ups, or zooms, or low angles to connote........
Well done for posting this raw footage and evaluating it but try to strengthen as advised above.